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Who saw the Ghost? Print E-mail
Written by Thomas Kai Toteh   
Wednesday, 11 November 2009
africanskyA Short Story PART I

“Did you say you saw a ghost?” “Yes, I saw her clearly.” Did you say her?” “Yes, with my own eyes, my four eyes.” “And how do you distinguish a female ghost from a male ghost?” “I saw her hair.” “Did you say you saw a ghost?” Kaluo’s uncle, a great hunter went back and forth questioning him about his ghost story.

Is Kaluo’s ghost story a mere imagination and recollection of his uncle’s hunting tales about strange hunters and dwarfs in the jungle?

Alfred was perhaps disorienting Kaluo’s state of mind-to discontinue his story about an encounter with a ghost. Seeing ghosts should be the prerogative of elders and hunters,” said an elder. “Who is Kaluo to see a ghost?” another elder asked. “Kaluo, I will ask you one more time,” hunter Alfred said. “Did you see a ghost?”  “Yes, yes, I saw a ghost. I saw it again and again and the third time she vanished from my sight. I saw her. I saw a ghost. She wore fine clothes-like Christmas clothes. She was fine, she was shinning. The sun rays reflected from her-like a mirror.” “Shut up,” Alfred yelled, placing his index finger to Kaluo’s mouth. “Ommm, ghost, ommm ghost, Kaluo continues discretely-I saw it. I saw her. She was standing on the road side near the grave, maybe her grave.”

“Okay, Kaluo do you remember the story about the strange hunter?”   “Did you say a strange hunter?” “Yes, a strange hunter who was sitting at the rive bank; light skinned, huge, and tall.”  “Oh, you mean the man who disappeared from your presence?” “Yes, I mean Jla.”  “Jla?” “Yes Jla.”  “He’s the one you likely saw through your imagination.” “No, Kaluo replied. I did not see Jla. I saw a female ghost standing before the grave near our creek. She looks young and beautiful and innocent.”

“But Kaluo what did you do to see a ghost?” “Nothing, only I was running from the man you sent to catch and beat me when I saw a ghost.” After two days, hunter Alfred asked Kaluo, “Did you see the ghost again?” “No, I have not seen the ghost again and I don’t want to see it, anyway.” The ghost story was becoming to scare most young folks who usually went to the creek to swim when it was sultry. The creek was near the grave yard where a 16 years old girl-the first young person was buried. Her name was Soma. She was poisoned only because she was very beautiful. Before Kaluo’s encounter with the ghost, other children have told their mothers how a beautiful young girl had appeared and disappeared, but their mothers hushed them.

But Kaluo would not hush. The creek is locked down until the ghost story is unraveled. The children are sneaking out to the creek anyway, hoping to see the ghost. And they are asking each other who first saw the ghost. The children’s defiance of their parents’ order to not go to the creek until the ghost story is solved is becoming to change the ghost story.

Watch out for part II
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Author’s note: This is a true story. Some of the characters are fictitious.




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1. 12-11-2009 02:01
 
Thomas, you are starting again
Thomas, you are starting again... I hope you know what you are bringing towards yourself again. If I were you I would just forget about writing stuff on this forum. Please find something better to do.  
remember what happened to you when you used to copy and paste other people article until you were cut on this forum. I know who wrote the story you just posted. Pls don't let me hang mouth on you. Please withdraw this article because it is not yours.  
 
Thank you and may god bless you. 
 
Al
 
Al
2. 12-11-2009 09:32
 
Why waste ur time
Why waste your time, corward Jackson Towah now Al. Toteh is an artist. He has written many articles on this forum.  
 
you are only doing this because Toteh caught you plagiarizing and lying. 
 
do you think people are stupid like you? The story above is Toteh's' unless you are unfamiliar with Toteh's writing. You are a big fool.
 
Toteh's fan
3. 12-11-2009 10:55
 
What a Compliment!
Al has given me a compliment without him/her knowing it.  
 
My other intuation is that this person is threatened by my coming back on forum. I know who this person is.  
 
If this is not my work that means it is beyond what you think I can do. That is, yet still, it is too good to be mine.  
 
Well, thank you, but it's mine. Sorry!! Thanks for your compliment unknowingly, anyway
 
Toteh, Thomas Kai
4. 12-11-2009 19:20
 
This is where you got the article from
Everyone, check this out: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Wikipedia#Kaluo_and_the_Ghosts 
 
Toteh Thomas Kai, You are such a pretender.  
 
I am not Jackson Towah.  
 
May God bless you, 
 
Al
 
Al
5. 13-11-2009 18:16
 
Attention Al
I have read your criticism of Thomas Kai Toteh's short story and you said that he apparently "got the article" from Wikipedia. I checked Wikipedia but did not come across the "article" that you claimed Thomas "got" from that sight. To be honest I have followed Mr. Toteh's writings on this site and other sites and I am convinced of his competency in a simple short story like the one in question. Were you saying he got the "ideas" from somewhere? Or you meant he took the entire short story from another site? When I checked the recommended site, there was nothing like that. My point is, it appears to me that you have an old score to settle with Thomas. If that is the case as your two posts indicate, then I will suggest you settle it with a phone call. As far as this site is concerned, let's encourage writing and creativity. Let's provide constructive criticism for the works that we, and I said we since I am involved in writing similar work, so we can look back and see how effective the internet has been to us and our efforts to communicate our ideas and stories to those who may care to read them. If you are not interested in any article or short story or commentary posted, please ignore it. Help by making constructive comments about and on those artistic writings that deserved to be praised. I am convinced, having followed Thomas Kai Toteh's writings that he deserves commendation but not condemnation. I am no judge over the opinions of others, just a humble writer, who believes in the spirit of man. Generally we are all good people, hence we should allow our goodness to be manifested in our dealings with fellow Liberians. If it is okay, AL give me a call 678-933-9151, so that we can continue to dialogue in the interest of our creative desires. May the good in you make you receptive to what i have said and please let me end here, as your obedient servant.
 
Omari Jackson
6. 13-11-2009 20:25
 
A coward is a coward
Al if you were a real man you would have written your full name. How can you challenge someone’s story with a pen name? You are the dumbest person ever on this forum. 
 
However, I know who is behind the so-called Al. This person is a victim of his own stupidity some months back. My absence from the forum gave him some relief because he hated me so much.  
My appearance back on the forum greatly upsets and threatens him again. 
 
My Message to you, Al and your accomplices: you may succeed by display your rudeness and cheap lies aimed at discouraging me to stop publishing on this web site, but you can't take away my talents and skills. 
 
If you goggle my name you will find hundreds of web sites, I mean reputable web sites where my articles and other stories are published, including news papers. Please remember that I may not publish on this web site again due to personal reasons-not due to your stupidity, I am here almost everyday.  
 
Finally, Thousands of sound minded people know my capabilities, and as such the nonsense you posted is a mockery of yourself and how simple you are. Now you may have your Liberian forum all to yourself without Toteh. I am too good to be in the mix of the likes of Al. I have since decided to quit this web site due to some childishness around here. And as I can see, a bunch of fools and idiots who have nothing to offer to visitors and friends of this site are roaming about here to destroy good people. 
Thanks, but I am watching the person behind Al 24/7. I will not exhibit the rudeness in return, but I got the tactics to neutralize you and remove you from behind your pen name with a face and identity. Good-bye!!
 
Toteh, Thomas Kai
7. 13-11-2009 23:48
 
Reconciliation
Gentlemen, 
Do you know that disagreements without common ground has ruin so many good intent? Do you also know that the future of Liberia is in the hands of those that seek the path of leadership and reconciliation? So, why fuss? 
 
Disagreement is not an end to a means but a conduit through which we can properly channel and address 
our concerns. Let us come together real quick to find a common ground. 
 
I am available to help resolve this problem so we continue to read nice article after a busy day's work. I can be reached at 267-736-1478 or This e-mail address is being protected from spam bots, you need JavaScript enabled to view it  
 
I am, 
 
Sincerely 
Samuel E. Greaves 
Philadelphia
 
Samuel E. Greaves
8. 14-11-2009 01:19
 
Jackson Towah
Jackson Towah you are afraid of Dr.Thomas Kai Toteh. This is why you are hidding behind pen name. I dare you to show yourself.  
 
Al or whoever, are you afraid of Toteh? Yes , you do. This is why you can not properly identify yourself.  
 
Toteh, you are a very great man. Towah be warned. The child who says my mother will not sleep will have swollen eyes. 
 
Since you Towah failed to publish your credentials after lying to us, you are now acting stupid around here. 
 
But guess what, since Toteh wants to be polite, I will take it up with you. I will mark you step-by-step on this forum every time you put your name on Glay's works.  
 
I will also finish the business Toteh left undone when good people begged him to let you have face after lying about your credentials.  
 
I will publish the rest of your files beginning with your drug abuse and shopolifiting, which I discovered during my research and background check. 
 
I am James Teah. I am not a coward like you to hide behind Al.
 
James Teah
9. 17-11-2009 16:12
 
Al motive?
Al accusation that Thomas copy and pest his ghost story is an exaggeration to say the least.Also, prosonal attacks betray the purpose of an intellectual forum. Many who frequent this forum know the writing styles and subject matters of most regular contributors such as Thomas Toteh. He is a thoughtful and brilliant writer, someone with the courage to comment on popular issues. I think Al criticism stemmed from observation that Thomas story came after a similar story (Death After Dishonor) had been posted by Omari Jackson, another regular contributor who change styles recently from political discussions to short story. Omari’s ghost story was a master piece, and there is a sentiment that Thomas wanted to take away the spotlight by posting his own ghost story which by comparison has little twists and drama as Omari ‘s. Al is aware of the literary competition among popular writers on this site, and their tendency, albeit salent to undo each other. Please forgive me if I interpreted Al motive wrongly, but I strongly believe Al suspected that Thomas story was not original because it try to capture the audience imagination away from a ghost story that truely resonate with Liberians.
 
Sekou
10. 17-11-2009 16:44
 
A smart Observation Sekou
Sekou, you hit the nail on the head. I am not surprise, for I have been following and reading your writings here. 
 
Omari and I do often discuss literature by exchanging ideas on how we can transform political writings or politicizing Liberia's political future into poetic and literary styles.  
 
It is unfortunate that some brothers don't follow the path of intellectual exchanges on this forum. 
 
Al is a very cheap blackmailer. You must blackmail a man without people knowing it so easily that you are only blackmailing him because of hatred and malice.  
 
From your analysis of the two short stories,Omari and mine, I am convinced that you have been reading, though you did not post comments. 
 
I critiqued Omari's short story; and decided to, as you rightly observed, “Thomas wanted to take away the spotlight by posting his own ghost story which by comparison has little twists and drama as Omari‘s."  
 
Thanks brother for your literary-comprehensive knowledge of the subject. 
Log live Liberia; yea Africa!
 
Toteh, Thomas Kai

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